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 Post subject: Check tha newb!
PostPosted: 04/28/10 03:20:45 PM 
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this is a new concept im workin on me vs myself the mc vs the real me if u will....... plz let me kna whachu think or jump on it!
(p.s i listen to alot of wu so its heavy on the personal metaphors... might not make sense to everyone)

behold a flow so slow see an emcee grow n da beat unfoldin
truth told he knows no hope neck roped this how he's cope'n
he do some chokin,no focus so he wrote this for his-self
i spoke thin,n potent but still couldnt help.
ima wealth of knowledge homage whatchu pay
baby emcees couldnt see it get played
stay behind the line or ur time be done
im a giant on the mic and a david, ur not one


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 Post subject: Re: Check tha newb!
PostPosted: 04/29/10 04:15:26 PM 
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no thoughts.... anyone..... i feel so alone....so cold.... :comfort:


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well, you could have worded this a little better, multies were used here and there. all in all, this is a decent drop.. keep working at it fam.

~DT~

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Luke 11:1-4
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The Model Prayer

Now it came to pass, as He was praying in a certain place, when He ceased, that one of His disciples said to Him, “Lord, teach us to pray, as John also taught his disciples.”

2 So He said to them, “When you pray, say:

Our Father in heaven,
Hallowed be Your name.
Your kingdom come.
Your will be done
On earth as it is in heaven.
3 Give us day by day our daily bread.
4 And forgive us our sins,
For we also forgive everyone who is indebted to us.
And do not lead us into temptation,
But deliver us from the evil one.”

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Hebrews 11:1
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11 Now faith is the substance of things hoped for, the evidence of things not seen.


John 14:6
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6 Jesus said to him, “I am the way, the truth, and the life. No one comes to the Father except through Me.


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PostPosted: 07/02/10 07:34:36 PM 
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my 2 cents

With a concept as complex as this one it may actually be better to go with a more simple structured flow and rhyme scheme. Remember we as readers have to understand and follow along what you are tryin to write.

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