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ok lets start this..just warming up


you're played out like ferbie
ya bitch look like Fergie
you'd sell your soul like b.e.p
but the ass raping industry
claimed you ain't worthy
im other worldly
you ain't gonna get fame for being girly
and feminine
pearly white teeth
from dick sucking to gain access to entrances
you have to be a slutly bitch
not some punk fake gangster
whose about to switch to gain a bum fuckery which
will lead to stitches and gay visits
wippits and aids victims
poppers and dockers
fudge packers and crackers
zip it
its me the
rocket to a g5
wasps to a bee hive
costs of acting blind
on your knees till he undoes his levi's
these eyes seen a lot whack-ness
even through text i can see him masturbating
on his mattress
to this diss
specially my verse
what a disgrace you get blacklist
back lit
in the back of a hearse
cant hack it
so you have to pack it up
you lack the piss & vinegar
so you keep lapping the piss up
and hiss when its me the winnerer
beat you twice in one round with a finisher
fatality
you stay diminished and wimpier
cause you like to stay simpler
i pimped this game of words and came back tight and more sinister
you gimped the fame for turds to lather in the shit gimmick turf
the land where its all plastic and you bleed
till it hurts
but keep lifting up ya skirt!!!
bout to riot lets get on this
but lets be honest this kids
more gentle then gretzky in the plexiglass
even in his peak performance
this geek'll tweet and text after this
thinking there's an asterisk
but no comment
its done
you're a bug i could kill with pesticide
and leave you less alive
then the the sperm I jerk on you girls tits
and thighs
i don't have to twist the truth or speak the lies
no disguise its in your face kid you're basic
pissed and mystified
that i came with this
a fist to split you in half
leave you with
each eye
staring at opposite sides
a 360 views of the massacre
i left you to die!

havent been on in long time..i fucked up my user name

the ending was suppose to be like this
'staring at opposite sides
a 180 view of the massacre
i left you to die in
im in your blind spot
you cant see the mess i left
your families lives in.

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Alright... that was long as hell dude lol

I'm Killing Kindred's Soul, as I massacre his corpse with it
I am the tough guy in this battle, Bitch.. eat more spinach
I will have no remorse, you should abort this mission
Teach this cat a lesson, but he cant afford tuition
Stop acting like you've done this before, we can tell your fake
with three word lines, kid just accelerate
I can rap like you too
I can drop crap like you too
You generic fag, rocking shit like bufu
You shoot who?
I just disapprove dude
As I smash your chin
than watch go shoot through your roof dude
Im back in the game now, im rap are flames bound
with electric volts, and strike the floor while we're on the same ground
And watch your body trembles, and shaking you quickly
Than you try to hop on my nuts like you want to move with me
stop talking, stop rapping.. just stop period dude
I will step into gear, and induct fear in his truth

sorry, just wasn't exactly in the mood to write. But, we'll see how it goes.

Kindred - a lot of filler in that verse that softened your best lines since they were sort of spaced out through the verse. Your verse was choppy at times to me as the short lines made me lose the flow some. A re-structure and killing some of the filler and your really working with pretty solid material.

Drastic - you got to the point on this one with some strong lines and definitely the better flow of the verse.

Round one Drastic.

Thanks for the votes Vybez, I appreciate it!..

Drastic - 1

Ryu - 0

yeah definitely if you restructure your bars then it will read better and hit harder...it's just kind of irritating to read it like that and it's more of a poem outline...drastic gets this round

if you can change your structure then I would like to see a round 2...

Drastic gets my vote for a better verse period..

RND 1: Drastic.

No need to write a novel boys

4 - 0

I believe I took this.