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 Post subject: Dreamz Tourney '04-Lost Marblez Vs Jon Talbian
PostPosted: 08/29/04 10:43:34 PM 
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Welcome, first to six votes, no playing off each others verse
both competitors must check in first.
once both checked in you have 10 days to drop your verse
1 round elimination, winner moves on, loser is out. good luck

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illness...is there a glitch in the matrix or have I seen this before?

Lets make this Hot marbz...checky!!

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Check one, two.

Word Jon, lets do this.

Peace and may the best man win.

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This will be my last ever battle if I lose...

I know I'm ill, so motherfuck a tournament/
Strangle you with tourniquets and bottle your ashes for ornaments/
It's the new order, cunt. Sasquatch prints cave your ribs in/
Chances slim with Marbz inflicting death when you just have gimmicks/
Homo Jon. You know it's on. You'll never see another round/
My knuckles scour you're fucking crown while you suck on your mother's hair smothered mound/
See the fire rise from my eyes with typed lines that stamp your name/
Pile drive you from heights of skylines and shatter your ample frame/
Who is this pansy dame? Newbie trying to gain recognition with petty disses/
Sick fuck craving young cunt so offering to dress his sisters/
I'll see it through. You pleae your crew by swallowing semen goo/
This beast ensues my rhymes slap you so hard you fall out of your orthapaedic shoe/
What would Jesus do? I'll stain a crucifix with your useless bits. Yup, bitch...all of you!/
"I'm dope" That's all the proof we your dick sucking lips could never form a truth/
You're clutching at stars like tortured jews. You claim the most tight?/
I slaughter souls, tranform your spirit into lyrics so you can ghost write/

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oh... my... god! You are disgustin as fuck man quit listening to Vinnie Paz n shit.

TDW

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Round elimination......Lets Do this

(6.0 inner flow version)

Yo its my time to win this tournament, marbz ya spits mixed with sperm and piss,
little gay Bitch! I scorch ya wrist limbs and liver til its burned to scripts/
Now watch me turn and twist this kid marbz torso til it curves and splits,
then eat this MZ Piggy raw like Kermit did/
You rock the posture of invertebrates, Lost Marblz you need to learn ta rip,
Somethin with verbal in instead a quarter page written of gore words or shit/

(6.0 punch/worplay version)

my head cuts 'ablation abrasions', so marblz 'secretly keeps that in mind',
my status is meta' Morphius', you not the 'won' cuz we know 'neo' eventually dies/
Watch this 'dope' crumble 'quick' with clean 'blow' 'crunched lines,'
Talbian pummels and muffles marbz easy cuz he's 'softer' than 'Sponge Bob'/
Hittin marbz in the face wit proactive, even if I rap these 'back-words' anomaly like 'cat, dog?'/
Your no match marbz, im bull-dozen 'bogie's' to ya mouth piece and make 'marbles' back off/

(6.0 previous battle version)

We've combat before, was swell...but the swellins gone down, lets revisit now,
bet's odds This basterd of a Mods gonna DQ me out delete'n my post sayn I didn't submit this round/
yet this poor vet could never contest facts my style blazed him,
my metaphors so ahead of marbz petty bars I rip him til he's caged in/
as a constant reminder you wont escape this, men viewing the landscape screams death..
so I must oblige them, so once im done with u I'll toss the crowd your head/

(6.0 finish him version)

YA TIMES NOW, this is it the last six kill or be killed,
But this a written red note, LIGHTS OUT like you delinquent on ya utility bill/
These Punch lines 'PoP ya eyes' out like the spoon in ya sig did...
before u summited ya 'vintage' ya penmanship should've been backed with a 'spin edge'/
then maybe you'd survive this display of erase'n ya fate,
or playd like homo suburban kids wishing they ghetto, and stayd where its safe/

I was hope'n to wait til the ninth day to write...cool tho.
Good luck marbz.

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PostPosted: 09/07/04 09:11:05 PM 
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^nice battle, props to both emcees

heres tha Tourney crit/vote breakdown:

Flow=Mardz's flow was solid but contained a few small typo's, JT also came with a solid flow but his was polished...

Imagery=Marbz had his usual gore, very visual/grotesque; JT had less in his verse...

Personals=Marbz had none that I could pin-point; JT had 5, 3 were hard in impact...

Punches=Marbz's orthopedic/shoes and ghost-write lines were his best, JT's mizz piggy/kermit, Mod/DQ, bars/caged-in, lights out/utility bill, and suburban kids lines were really nice, I felt those more....

Wordplay=Marbz again had none I could pin-point; JT had more tho most of it wasn't very creative aside from tha dope/crunched lines line...

Rhymes=Marbz had good mixture of multies and vocab thru-out his verse, JT's verse had good multis also but were mainly focused at tha begining, vocab was decent but seemed to use Marbz name too much thru-out his verse....

Closure=Marbz's closure was his best line IMO, but JT also finished with a dope one, tie

Overall= Vote Jon Talbain

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TYPOS? LOLOLOL... that's funny I never seen someone get judged on typos fuckin lamer.

anyways, I'm gonna vote for J-T also for obvious reasons being Lost Marblez just didn't come real enough for me tho I can imagine him spittin that shit with his grimy ass voice and tear apart a track. Good for track not good for battle that's what I think.

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Damn this is tough. Both verses were really dope, JOn: you broke yours down pretty well, adding a little of something from each aspect, nice. Marbz came consistant with blood and descriptive punches, all nicley worded. Really tough but Im giving my vote to LM with a more imaginitve and bloody verse.


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both verses were good, not great, nor spectacular, but good...gotta go with JT though cuz he was more creative..

Vote: Jon_Talbian

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I agree with Blank on this... Both good verses.. and hard to choose one over
the other.. I preferred a couple of Marblez lines a bit more to JT's at the end
of the day tho.. so Vote = LM

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JT had more in his verse...If marblez matched it probably would've been different...
vote jt

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okay....you surely dont have to do me any favors, Hey think about ya votes people..matter of fact stop reading my verse after the 16th bar.
you catz take the fun outta shit, honestly I didn't even read marbz verse
until I submitted mine...rules state 24bar max i was sure we both would push that limit easy...and I didn't short marbz on effort for one moment, I dropped what I felt could beat him...my guess is he did the same.
Im more than fair than what can be said for a lot of members on this site.

So I guess in some sort of good taste I only have two real votes for me.

So its 2-2 tied up,

Note who ever votes for me next go by this verse.


Yo its my time to win this tournament, marbz ya spits mixed with sperm and piss,
little gay Bitch! I scorch ya wrist limbs and liver til its burned to scripts/
Now watch me turn and twist this kid marbz torso til it curves and splits,
then eat this MZ Piggy raw like Kermit did/
You rock the posture of invertebrates, Lost Marblz you need to learn ta rip,
Somethin with verbal in instead a quarter page written of gore words or shit/
my head cuts 'ablation abrasions', so marblz 'secretly keeps that in mind',
my status is meta' Morphius', you not the 'won' cuz we know 'neo' eventually dies/
Watch this 'dope' crumble 'quick' with clean 'blow' 'crunched lines,'
Talbian pummels and muffles marbz easy cuz he's 'softer' than 'Sponge Bob'/
Hittin marbz in the face wit proactive, even if I rap these 'back-words' anomaly like 'cat, dog?'/
Your no match marbz, im bull-dozen 'bogie's' to ya mouth piece and make 'marbles' back off/
We've combat before, was swell...but the swellins gone down, lets revisit now,
bet's odds This basterd of a Mods gonna DQ me out delete'n my post sayn I didn't submit this round/
yet this poor vet could never contest facts my style blazed him,
my metaphors so ahead of marbz petty bars I rip him til he's caged in/

General Statement:
I wanna win or loose because you thought my verse was better or worse than my opponents..thats what this shits all about. I write because I enjoy too I LOVE HIPHOP and the art of music.
Im tryna win this as well,and if I do? Im still gonna write,If I loose?
Im still gonna write.Some of u catz clame to have true respect for the art and deem yourselves as vets,but vets of what? Even tho I wrote against marbz It was written for yall to see...do the science.

I respect you 100% Marbz,I think you dope as hell. But I dont want you ta have a cheap lose nor me getting a cheap victory.Especially with this being ya last battle ever and all,I'd DQ myself before I let that happen.


2-2

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Whats all this about Jon ? can you change a verse half way through a round ?
I would accept a vote from anyone who's posted so far in this thread..They
can all write a decent rhyme and all have different opinions on what makes a
verse work for them.. Ive never offered much crit in my votes .. I never
have and I never will ..especially when it comes down to a couple of blokes
who can write well like you and Marbz.. Its like tellin' someone how to suck
eggs in my opinion.. If theres something that I reckon would improve someones
verse then i'll mention it .. Breakin' rhymes down into flow-multi's etc takes
the fun out of it all for me.. and im only in this shit to have fun with it... :)
As for the "Vets" thing... theres very few blokes on here who I would say
consider themselves that.. its more of a case of a certain few who proclaim
others as such and apply the label.. Im just a 30 year old drunkard with a
beer gut who doesnt look so good in a tracksuit anymore.. The only time I
claim im better than anyone else is when it comes down to battle ...
:beer:

If you really want to know what swung my vote.. it was the image of Marbz
pile drivin' yer off the top of skyscrapers.. Ive seen a photo of him and
that would be a sight to behold.. ;)

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Yo you cool peeps Bloke, It just seems like catz cheeping my method to win this. I wanna see heads vote because they liked the battle verses we both submited and chooses a victor between the two.

Not because I had more lines or reason=??. That shits wack to me and forces me to believe the possibility the person may not have even read my verse.

I dont know man...Jon has been tainted by this sites bitching and gripe's and hate'n and shit talking for no reason. Its startin ta rubb off on me a lil bit.Some catz creditability is un-trust worthy and its that way because they give themselves that status by sayn stupid shit.

I could easily be wrong about the votes I took away...eh..
Its hard to know what ta think on this site these days.
Bottom line I just want fairness, shit if you dont like me but think my verse
was better?Dont vote. I dont need anyone cheeping my shit.
I've seen emcees write a 32bar verse of nice shit and loose to a 10bar verse of what people thought was hotness.

I dont know man plus im really drunk...I just want fairness..thats it.

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hmmm...I don't know what your problem is but it seems your directing that statement at me...All I'm saying in my vote is that both of you had good verses but the way marblez was typing I think he may have taken it imo if he wrote 24 bars...I never put you down so whatever man... :roll: ...I voted for the better verse and always do...Just cause you and villian is but buddies don't need to get fucking pissy about shit...Grow up...

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I think marblez wrecked it with his verse I dont know I thought his imagery and punches were better, I mean it doesnt necessarily have to be the same length to win. no doubt your verse was dope jt, how you broke it down in sections, but I felt marbz verse was more of a battle verse, he kept it straight to the point.

vote lost marblez

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hmmm...I don't know what your problem is but it seems your directing that statement at me...All I'm saying in my vote is that both of you had good verses but the way marblez was typing I think he may have taken it imo if he wrote 24 bars...I never put you down so whatever man... :roll: ...I voted for the better verse and always do...Just cause you and villian is but buddies don't need to get fucking pissy about shit...Grow up...


Aight yo you can kill that noice kid cuz now ya talking stupid But anyway ya gotta excuse me when im jrunk yall...im still haven fun with this shit so there's no problems here I just wanna make sure kids is vote'n outta fairness....alot of bullshit goes on around here and I dont want any of it. Thats All. No disrespect to ANYONE.

4-3=JT

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good battle from both sides but ima have to give to L.M
He had a more hungry verse and wanted to kill jon T
JOn T was just trying to spar and lost was trying to brawl
so on that note

VOTE: LOST MARBLEZ :beer:

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its like this..

Atleast your battles geting votes, mine and Villians has been tied at four for 4 days!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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