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Read the rules thread then check in and get your battle started.

Chiggedy-check.

My bad, just knowledged this. Microphone checka!

Let it flow like water, Marblez.

Damn, and this the 14th day too, right?

Yup.

Now you've checked in I'll drop.

BOOM! Let the brain blow. I'll leave your verses dashed in the middle like J-Ro/
Such thing as a gay pro? Yeah, you'll win...somewhere over the raindbow/
Marblez burns incisions on these murder victims. You're a turd to critics/
Sharp tongue? Faggot. That's so you can carry out oral circumcisions/
Son the Sun Virus...easy. He's just another bitch to smoke/
You took fourteen days to check in, reflecting on my old rhymes like "Shit, he's dope!"/
You're style's gibberish, witless vocab backed with piss poor punches/
I'll hang you with scientifical word chains. Kid this is pure sonnage/
In person I'd reverse your nervous system to wretch your spine from where it lies/
Come flowing, cunt, not with those unfocussed love poems you only prepare for guys/
I'm perposterous! My commas hush competitor's verses. You'll leave a lost and forgotten queer/
They labelled this a "Vet Tourney" so I'm wondering how the fuck you got in here!/
I hold time with bold rhymes. Pause for thoughts and make the hours backflip/
I ponder your mere presence and being the peon you are I wonder "Can the coward match this?"/
So for a few secs look down on me until Earth shattering bars drop and your tower collapses/
This is me beating you in sixteen in the present. Imagine if I wasn't out of practice/

YO, I don't give the fuck of a nun, if I lost or I won, I bring more stun than a gun catapulting cars, so hardy har har internet star, I'M A SUN!/
I give u a bruising thought-full, get ur caveman style tumored awful, you'll never be hard to the core, I'm y u always losing marbles/
this deficient pubic crab itch fishing rap bitch 'gainst him? he bashes his emphatically passive shit in beyond recognition/
U don't wanna be antagonistic, bitch, you'll look like a funambulist, and your ass done slipped, are you surprised at how I smash u swift? It's my craft naturalistic/
smell, taste, feel, cee, or hear, I never fear, you could'nt be me if u reverse grafted 600 years/
your persnickety ass style is rickety, I leave it hickory, burn ur mind out like a psychedelic daydream of being strangled by a symphony/
read these words of ur defeat, they're stuck in ur cerebral sinus, not just a disease, fuck a bacteria, this is a supreme virus/
ur force is run over like a caravan of semi trucks, there's no such thing as luck, but there is brainwash, cee, my immune system is deluxe, get urself hung by my magnetic flux/
devoured like an ant in a spider's web, skilled enough to swipe ur head
clean off ur carcass sitting in the chair like best ever sniper bred/
u should suggest HHE insurance, fucking with me, you'll give ur denial of failure assurance, get layers shockwaved off u by the speed of my endurance/
I gives a fuck you're some type of alumni, you don't have the strength to stunt I, trying to hold me down, you and your pussyfunk rhymes are launched dumb high^^^^^^^/
what's a vote? u get choked to croak for testin a provoke, that's like inhaling radioactive smoke/
or like eating a kilogram of coke, the total of bars in your verse are the equivalent to a joke/
hahaha, I throw counterattacks that pound, fracture, crack, and distract, improvise ur facts, closed fist bitchsmack, I'll go spontaneous on ur act/
throw the camera across ur back, swing my mic atchu while u rap, make it hard to believe I'd rather not hear guns go clap/
you're battling an uncut version, the unbreakably unbearable, ur massengill ass toughness gets laid out like a forcefucked virgin/
left anguished stiff, ur attempt vanishes because u've been vanquished with, my unorthodox tyin tight of bloodclot-like knots of ur faint net spits/
cut off ur flow of painlessness, ur rep get a broken neck for trying to connect correct, u were better off evading this dangerousness/

Man, y'all both wordy as hell. Nice drops though.

Marblez was more focused, didn't wander all over the place like Budahead Gonzo.

If Sharptongue would have concentrated his form he would have taken it, but it was all sprawled out.

Marblez

First of all I don't how slow the beat is that Sharp Tongue was writing to but that's way more than 16 bars...


And consequently, it's much too wordy...Neither one made me laugh too much and the flow from both was basic...Still, I'd have to say Marblez simply because it was more concise.

Marblez takes this hands down. Alot more direct, hard hitting and ruthless. Sharptongue u would benefit from structuring ur style better, n making you're disses contain a harder impact.. it's a good thing 2 have a large vocabulary, but u have 2 support that vocab with viciousness, clarity and structure..

Very nice 2 see u droppin battle verses again Marblez mate..

No doubt sharp tongues would probably sound ill on the mic but for a text battle I would say marblez got it...Less words and straight to the point...

vote marblez

[quote="SharpTongue Sun Virus"]YO, I don't give the fuck of a nun, if I lost or I won, I bring more stun than a gun catapulting cars, so hardy har har internet star, I'M A SUN!/

Marblez definitely takes this...way better punches, imagery, and mulites...and SharpTongue had way too long of a verse..LM wins by KO.


Winner: Lost Marblez

Heheheheh, you gotta be fucking kidding me. Whatever.

STILL can't fuck with the god.

Yes, it was 18 bars, I thought u meant at least 16.
Victimizer, u know what? I'ma put this shit on wax tomorrow.

Do you do any recording...Again, I don't know how you're counting bars, but that shit is at least 24..

I do a little recording, not as much as I wanna do on the level I want(main source is a portable cassette player ).........24?........ .....shit, Iunno. I guess?

if a beat is in 4/4 it means that every count of 4 is a bar...

Most hip hop songs are in this time...


Just something to keep in mind when you start recording.

LM got that easily nice to see you dropping bombs again on these suckaz.

Sharptongue or balance da pharmacys whatever you call yourself man... that was past 24 bars homey. If I've told you once I've told you a thousand times make your verses more visually compatible for the average reader that shit was waaaaay too complex for a battle format. I dig your vocab but simplify that shit some. I'm not even sure if you could spit a verse like that over a beat and if you did it would come out sounding like some Company Flow type ish off their Funcrusher Plus album. I already understand you don't care if you win or not but I'm just offering you some constructive criticism, and don't get offended like you did last time. I had that same problem for a while man, making my verses too wordy and complex. I'm not saying dumb down your style, but sometimes less is more you feel me? Like my favorite emcee of all time, the Genius/GZA said: "fuck all those weak rhymes that's mad long/keep it brief son, half short and twice strong".

Man I can't wait until I can post some recorded material up so I can show ya'll how I get down.